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Must be ORIGINAL... <Originally posted by KittynMeow:hahahhaa,... *clap clap* kekekeke..... tho i thot it was humpty dumpty... kekeke
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Originally posted by Devil1976:Humpy Dumpy
Humpy Dump sat on the wall,
Humpy Dump had a big fall!
All the king's cousins...
And all the king's man...
Cannot put humpy dumpy back again...
~WAAHahahahaha... <> "
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This one I 'jia bak' liao then it came to my head one...Originally posted by DeadPoet:
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LOlz.. cute and funnY!!Originally posted by Devil1976:Humpy Dumpy
Humpy Dump sat on the wall,
Humpy Dump had a big fall!
All the king's cousins...
And all the king's man...
Cannot put humpy dumpy back again...
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Hmm... should I extend my deadline ....
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i know i can make it!! grr ...... a few attempts leow but they juz dun seem to come out right
....... dun stress dun stress .....
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Ur avatar look stressed.Originally posted by True_Xerion:i know i can make it!! grr ...... a few attempts leow but they juz dun seem to come out right ....... dun stress dun stress .....
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Looks like the man in the iron mask.Originally posted by laurence82:Ur avatar look stressed. -
hmmm ok very late leow, muz start!!! Met an old man at East Coast Park last night; he asked for the time, i asked his age. Talked a little, here's:
81
As forlorn moon in a wayward sky falls,
a solitary shadow across unlit park cuts.
in shabby garb, bag in hand.
anguish in his drifting orbs.
sanctuary a cold husk,
family shuns infirmity.
dismal thoughts,
castaway.
ps. sorry if it sucks ...... juz noticed my vocab comprises of a lotta 'E's haha! -
Originally posted by True_Xerion:
er.... disqualified cos got e in "home"... can change and resubmit??? keke
hmmm ok very late leow, muz start!!! Met an old man at East Coast Park last night; he asked for the time, i asked his age. Talked a little, here's:
[b]81
As forlorn moon in a wayward sky falls,
a solitary shadow across unlit park cuts.
in shabby garb, bag in hand.
anguish in his drifting orbs.
home is a cold husk,
family shuns infirmity.
dismal thoughts,
castaway.
ps. sorry if it sucks ...... juz noticed my vocab comprises of a lotta 'E's haha!
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You are
My only half
How I long for you
How you stay in my mind for long
I ask my soul
That day as I look at you
I know
I will always think of you
For you am it
Why you I ask
You I do not know
But thus far
I sing your words with all my soul and spirit of the mind -
Originally posted by True_Xerion:
Other than the problem with 'home', I think it's kinda strange in the sense that it blends in the 'feeling' VERY WELL??
hmmm ok very late leow, muz start!!! Met an old man at East Coast Park last night; he asked for the time, i asked his age. Talked a little, here's:
[b]81
As forlorn moon in a wayward sky falls,
a solitary shadow across unlit park cuts.
in shabby garb, bag in hand.
anguish in his drifting orbs.
home is a cold husk,
family shuns infirmity.
dismal thoughts,
castaway.
ps. sorry if it sucks ...... juz noticed my vocab comprises of a lotta 'E's haha!
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Originally posted by MoonIce:
Soft and gentle... I have noticed, it has been your style..?
[b]You are
My only half
How I long for you
How you stay in my mind for long
I ask my soul
That day as I look at you
I know
I will always think of you
For you am the it
Why you I ask
You I do not know
But thus far
I sing your words with all my soul and spirit of the mind
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Originally posted by MoonIce:
But err... Just noticed?
[b]You are
My only half
How I long for you
How you stay in my mind for long
I ask my soul
That day as I look at you
I know
I will always think of you
For you am the it
Why you I ask
You I do not know
But thus far
I sing your words with all my soul and spirit of the mind
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oopsOriginally posted by Devil1976:But err... Just noticed?
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thankx yah forgot to delete that word loh
me soft and gentle style???
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good or bad me soft and gentle?
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Originally posted by MoonIce:
some others that you didn't spot... and even after changing the line "For you am it" sounds odd....
[b]You are
My only half
How I long for you
How you stay in my mind for long
I ask my soul
That day as I look at you
I know
I will always think of you
For you am it
Why you I ask
You I do not know
But thus far
I sing your words with all my soul and spirit of the mind
[/b]
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don't really know how to answer that question... but i think it's good to have your own recognisable style...Originally posted by MoonIce:good or bad me soft and gentle? -
=p thankx btw my news songs n poem are upOriginally posted by KittynMeow:don't really know how to answer that question... but i think it's good to have your own recognisable style... -
For gentle love poems and the ones which are more 'refreshing', it's usually a good thing...Originally posted by MoonIce:good or bad me soft and gentle? -
wahaha .... ty ty ty! I bit stoned yesterday when typing leow ..... fixed & resubmitted! PaisehOriginally posted by KittynMeow:er.... disqualified cos got e in "home"... can change and resubmit??? keke
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Title got ‘e’ is okay.Originally posted by KittynMeow:some others that you didn't spot... and even after changing the line "For you am it" sounds odd.... -
Originally posted by True_Xerion:
TX .............hmm........ I like this poem!
hmmm ok very late leow, muz start!!! Met an old man at East Coast Park last night; he asked for the time, i asked his age. Talked a little, here's:
[b]81
As forlorn moon in a wayward sky falls,
a solitary shadow across unlit park cuts.
in shabby garb, bag in hand.
anguish in his drifting orbs.
sanctuary a cold husk,
family shuns infirmity.
dismal thoughts,
castaway.
ps. sorry if it sucks ...... juz noticed my vocab comprises of a lotta 'E's haha!
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First time come to my mind, remind me of one poem that I've wrote.
Secondly, title well chosen, '81', it can mean the age of the old man, can also mean the words in each line, i.e. from 8 words (1st line) to one word (8th line).
Number of words in the line can also mean at first he got a big family, maybe 8 of them? But now he is alone (1).
But why? Why was he rejected by his family? Something for us to think about ...
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heh ty tyOriginally posted by DeadPoet:TX .............hmm........ I like this poem!
First time come to my mind, remind me of one poem that I've wrote.
Secondly, title well chosen, '81', it can mean the age of the old man, can also mean the words in each line, i.e. from 8 words (1st line) to one word (8th line).
Number of words in the line can also mean at first he got a big family, maybe 8 of them? But now he is alone (1).
But why? Why was he rejected by his family? Something for us to think about ...
Good work TX! the 8-word line to 1-word line is actually what i started out working on inspired by the old man's age, as for the big family --> alone bit hmm, never thought of it that way!
TX