Paradise
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There's a place where dreams are real,
A place where hopes survive.
A place where no ones suffer,
We call that paradise.
In there you feels no pain,
And love rules all the way.
A place with no disaster,
Where friends are forever.
A place where you can be free,
A place for you and me.
A place where we could fly high,
We'll call it paradise.
It's a place we try to find -
I can only find it in my dreams
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cos u're not dead yet ma.Originally posted by Patrik:I can only find it in my dreams
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Just wondering what if you take out line one in stanza three and reposition the lines in stanza two i.e.
In there you feel no pain,
A place with no disaster.
And love rules all the way,
Where friends are forever.
In this case you will have a consistent rhyme pattern i.e. every second line rhyming with every fourth line in each stanza.
Just a suggestion.